failure

[olga]

all my life
I've tried to paint
just one picture
picture of him
always the same
absolutely perfect
it's still in me
unpainted

[lila]

can dream be a failure ?

Throughout* the most of my life
I feel that a preposition is missing here but I might be wrong

I have* always tried to paint
I think that this sounds better due to the time imperfection in the last two lines

[jjockerr]

"unpainted" is a failure i thing

[ Added: 2007-04-02, 08:32 ]
think

[yin]

all my life
I've tried to paint
just one picture
the picture of him
always the same
absolutely perfect
it's still in me
unpainted

u don't need'always' if u say 'all my life'
lila is right about the tense
'quite' cannot go with 'perfect' i think

anyway,a nice poem, olga

[yin]

i agree with jjockerr
it's a failure to paint

[olga]

lila, yin, thx.

[dunno]

all my life
I've tried to paint
just one picture
picture of him
always the same
absolutely perfect
it's still in me
unpainted

Upgrade your Photoshop and good luck!